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  Hello, Joshua! I'm Yeji.

I saw your <Surprise In Life>-2. When I read it, I found some grammer and vocabulary mistakes. 

So, (Please don't be upset or mad) I decided to make a letter about what to fix.

**Your story was really good!**

[Fixed part is written with red color~Please admire it and fix it(If you want)]

TO.Mrs.Perylin

Hello??? Mrs.Perylin! It is Jenna. 

In college, I made new friends! They are my room mates. One of the room mates is Lily and she is really pretty!

She has soft voice,big eyes ,brown hair. And she is kind too!

Another room mate is Lona. She is the higher orders. 

 Her family is Rich. She has some expensive item. And she is quiet and read many books. But I think she is being condescending.(What is condescending?) We'll get better. But she has good points. Sometimes she  tells me the right answer to my study.

She is so smart!! Also, Principal is going to make a dodge ball club!

I want join that club and sorry for the letter is too short. Bye~~

P.S

Mrs.Colin(Lily's mother) gave me new swim suit.

That is so pretty!.

~From your daughter Jenna~

To.Dear Mrs. Perylin

Oh! It is Jenna again.

I don't have many time so this letter will be short.

Today I played baseball. And it's Sarah's birthday, who is in a same class with me. Can I go to the birthday party?

(I deleted the P.S. part because Jenna already asked about going to a party.)

~From Jenna~

(Let me notice you something)

1. I think you should remember the character's name correctly. (Jenna, Mrs. Perylin)

2. You should write CAPITAL letter in the first word of the sentence. 

Ex. Hello! Nice to meet you.

3. Use CAPITAL letter in character's name. 

Ex. Jenna, Joshua, Yeji, Mrs. Perylin

4. I hope you can check your vocabulary (spelling) and grammer before you upload your writing. 

5. Do you mind if I check your grammer and vocabulary in your writing? If you mind, I will stop doing this.