i was so tired all day.
why i am tired all day!
i was think about reason of this.
yesterday i catch a cold then i have a pill.
but it has an enfluence on me.
now i am absent minded.
therefore i don't anything study which i must today.
but i am becoming better after i take a walk through the paths along the lake.
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I was so tired all day.
Why was I tired all day?
I thought about the reason.
Yesterday I caught a cold so I had a pill.
But it had an influence on me.
Now I am absent-mindid.
Therefore, I didn't study anything which I must study today.
But I am becoming better after I took a walk through the paths along the lake.
과거랑 현재를 전부 구분하지 않고 쓰셨네요.
지금 있는 일은 catch, have, don't 등으로 쓰시는 것이 맞지만
전에 있었던 일은 caught, had, didn't 등으로 쓰셔야 합니다.
"나는 어제 감기에 걸리다. 그래서 약을 먹는다." 이러면 좀 이상하죠.
그리고 "그래서 오늘 해야 할 공부를 하지 않았다."란 문장에서 뒤죽박죽이 되었군요.
좀 허접해 보이긴 하지만..
제가 처음에 썼을 때보단 잘 쓰셨네요..